Self-introduction letter activity
Dear Professor Blackstone,
I hope this letter finds you well. My name is Vellyn, and I am writing to introduce myself. I graduated from Nanyang Polytechnic in 2024 with a diploma in Advanced and Digital Manufacturing. My diploma may sound confusing at first glance, but it basically focuses on diverse 3D printing technologies.
My interest in civil engineering began during my second year of polytechnic when I learned about using 3D printing to construct homes in countries like the Netherlands. This inspired me to explore 3D modeling, especially of buildings and structures, sparking my curiosity about how complex structures are built. My greatest inspiration is the Marina Bay Sands hotel. I always wonder how such a huge and heavy structure can stand tall and proud throughout the years and withstand the fluctuating weather. By graduation, I knew I wanted to deepen my understanding of civil engineering, leading me to this course in SIT.
Regarding communication, I am an extrovert who enjoys engaging with others. However, I sometimes struggle with presentations. I tend to stutter and tremble, stemming from my insecurity about pronunciation. As someone who was not born in Singapore and having to learn English at a much later age of 6 years old, I found learning English challenging and still feel apprehensive about being judged for my pronunciation. Through this module, I aim to improve my confidence and presentation skills.
Lastly, I believe my cheerful personality sets me apart. While I may appear serious, I enjoy making others laugh and spreading positivity. I like to make jokes, bring up topics that I find interesting ang think others may like. I also like to smile and laugh at the smallest of things with my friends, and that brings the positivity level higher. I may not always have the best jokes, but I love creating lighthearted moments by being silly and goofy—because after all, laughter is the best medicine!
Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. I am excited to learn from you and explore the knowledge and experiences you will share with us!
Best regards,Vellyn Tan Yin Yin
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ReplyDeleteHi Vellyn! Reading your letter made me realise that you seem to be very interested in 3D works knowing from your letter that you did 3D printing to construct homes which I find it interesting! Overall your letter is great and it was easy to understand !
ReplyDeleteHowever, I think this sentence could be better. ‘My greatest inspiration is the Marina Bay Sands hotel. I always wonder how such a huge and heavy structure can stand tall and proud throughout the years and withstand the fluctuating weather.’ It could be better to connect the two sentences making it into one and type in past present tense.
I hope by the end of this module you will be able to overcome your challenges !
Hi Jannah!
DeleteThank you for your feedback, I deeply appreciate it! Thanks for pointing out my mistakes, definitely could have improve on that. And thank you for your kind words, let's overcome our challenges together!
Hello Vel, You have a very well-rounded letter. I learnt about your interests in 3D printing technologies, i too had little experience with it during my poly days but found it extremely intriguing. I hope we both will have the opportunity to try it out again during our time at SIT. I face similar problems as you with my presentations, i believe we will work this out together by the end of this tri! I agree that you are a hearty person. I hope to read more from you.
ReplyDeleteWarm Regards,
Vishva
Hi Vishva!
DeleteThank you for reading my letter and glad to have someone who faced the same challenges as me. Let's work on our weakness together and be a more confident person after this module!
Hi Vell! Your email provide a clear connection between your academic background, interest for civil engineering, and goals for improving communication skills. Your tone is warm and engaging, and the use of examples, for instance the renowned Marina Bay Sands and 3D printing in construction, adds depth to your narrative. The email is well-structured, but the statement “my diploma may sound confusing,” could be refined. Overall, it is a sincere email
ReplyDeleteHi Tristal!
DeleteThank you for reading my letter and providing feedback on how I can further improve my letter, really appreciate it! I agree with you that my sentence could be more refined and will take note in the future. All the best to you!
Hello Vel,
ReplyDeleteI'm glad that there's also people in our class that shares the same passion in 3D modeling! I would love to see the link on how your interest relates to your aspirations. You can also add in more examples to further better your letter. I love the way you format your letter and your conclusion.
Best Regards,
Chanelle
Hi Chanelle!
DeleteThank you for reading and the feedback! Is so nice to have someone else share the same passion as me as well. As for your feedback, I will definitely take note of it in the future so my letter will be much better. All the best to you!
ReplyDeleteDear Vellyn,
Thank you for this well developed, well focused and informative letter. You address the points of the brief very well.
I appreciate learning, for example, about your poly major area of study, the focus on 3D printing and how interest in topics such as "using 3D printing to construct homes" brought you in this stage of your journey to civil engineering at SIT.
I also appreciate you sharing in detail about your comm skill strength and weakness. It's interesting to me that since you came to Singapore as a child, you still seem to feel "learning English challenging," but in all honesty, I can't say that I have any issue understanding you. As you note though, this is really a confidence issue. I'd simply suggest that you make more of an effort at leaving your comfort zone and expressing yourself in public.
In your letter, you also explain in some detail how you like "making others laugh and spreading positivity." Your usual smile in class is a good first step for that, but again, I hope you can spread the vibe even more broadly by dropping your shyness and becoming more of a "public personality."
In terms of your language use, this letter is really a very solid effort.
I look forward to learning more about you this term.
Best wishes,
Brad
Hi Professor Blackstone!
DeleteThank you for your feedback, appreciate it a lot and I will definitely take note on the last part and add more elaboration to my sentence.
As for now, I am still neutral in my communication, but I will slip and make mistakes soon enough. Hopefully you can point it out and correct me. As for confidence, I totally agree with you, and I will work on that.
Hope to learn more from you and once again, thank you!
Regards,
Vellyn